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Message formatting

How to lay out emails and LinkedIn messages in a Victoria AI sequence so they're easy to read on a phone.

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Prospects scan outreach on phones and in notification previews. Short lines and white space say "this will be quick"; a wall of text gets skipped.

Format messages with short paragraphs

Give each idea its own short paragraph, with a blank line between them. Write the line breaks into the step itself; they're kept when it sends.

Hi {first_name},

Saw that {company} is hiring its first SDRs.

I help sales leaders at that stage book more first meetings by [a few words on how].

Mind if I send over [a short sample]?

The same message as one block reads like a template, and the ask gets lost.

Email formatting

  • Plain text. No images, banners or buttons.
  • No bold and no bullet points in the body; they read as marketing copy.
  • One or two sentences per paragraph.
  • The ask gets its own line, at the end.
  • No links and no attachments. A link goes out only in an Appointment Setter reply, when the prospect asks for it.

LinkedIn message formatting

  • LinkedIn keeps your line breaks, so use them: a greeting, the reason, the point and the ask, each as its own short paragraph.
  • No bullets or bold.
  • No links and no attachments.
  • If it looks long on a phone screen, cut it.

Subject line formatting

One short line, a few words, no sub-clauses. "quick question, {first_name}" works; a subject that summarises the whole email doesn't.

The read-aloud test

Read the message out loud. Every pause for breath is a line break. If you run out of breath before the end of a sentence, the sentence is too long.